This audio story was fun to create. I am not a great storyteller and I ALWAY hate listening to myself talk. In this story, you will find out why I HATE spiders. Enjoy!
I used WeVideo to record and edit this audio story.
What a story! I was pulled in when you first saw the spider that was the size of a baseball, no a basketball. Great job keeping me engaged til the end. The only thing I felt you could have improved on was maybe the ending of your story. I felt like it just stopped. Otherwise, super job!
The different tones and emphasis on different parts really kept me engaged and interested. I had to smile and I could connect to the changes, especially when you added your commentary here and there. When you introduced the dog, I would have put a larger punch on the name for effect. When you started to start about the spider coming at you, I would have put a little bit more fear or emotion into that part and then at the end when you got the bucket - you could potentially put a little pause between each set.
Overall though, great job, loved this story....and I hate spiders, too.
hmmmm. Your conclusion, which I've listened to several times, is confusing. I googled 'Ace Bucket' and think this might be rephrased '5 gallon bucket' because we don't have Ace hardware stores in my area here. I'm guessing the bucket was used to sit on by the fire. It almost sounds as if your brother is the spider... or your brother saved you from sitting on the leaves with a bucket seat. Anyway, I'm missing the punch line of the story. You don't have to spell out everything in a story and it is okay to allow the listener to put pieces together. Maybe the younger crowd is all over this story and not confused. If that is the case, and if that is your target audience, then you are fine.
I had some great feedback. Here are a few things that I adjusted: I reduced the music in the background between 5-10% in sections. adjusted my end text adjusted the quote text and made it italicized adjusted the clock image so that way it is consistent with the time I say I replaced the pandemic guidelines graphic with a graphic that is more consistent with the story I chose to not do the following: I did not change any of the music in the background. A comment was made to have one consistent background song. I wanted to have different songs to reflect the mood or the certain aspect of the story.
I have not really sat down and processed my school year yet. This was really my first experience doing that. I have always had this one experience in my mind since it has happened and that is what this story is about. It was difficult for me to find images that fit well into the story. I first wrote the script and I knew what I wanted, but finding creative common and copyright free images are difficult when you are creating a full length story without your own images. I used WeVideo to create and edit the entire video. "My One Goal" By Dmitry Bucklin
That was a great story! Very descriptive and informative. I felt like I was there. Nice job on your audio story!
ReplyDeleteWhat a story! I was pulled in when you first saw the spider that was the size of a baseball, no a basketball. Great job keeping me engaged til the end. The only thing I felt you could have improved on was maybe the ending of your story. I felt like it just stopped. Otherwise, super job!
ReplyDeleteThe different tones and emphasis on different parts really kept me engaged and interested. I had to smile and I could connect to the changes, especially when you added your commentary here and there. When you introduced the dog, I would have put a larger punch on the name for effect. When you started to start about the spider coming at you, I would have put a little bit more fear or emotion into that part and then at the end when you got the bucket - you could potentially put a little pause between each set.
ReplyDeleteOverall though, great job, loved this story....and I hate spiders, too.
hmmmm. Your conclusion, which I've listened to several times, is confusing. I googled 'Ace Bucket' and think this might be rephrased '5 gallon bucket' because we don't have Ace hardware stores in my area here. I'm guessing the bucket was used to sit on by the fire. It almost sounds as if your brother is the spider... or your brother saved you from sitting on the leaves with a bucket seat. Anyway, I'm missing the punch line of the story. You don't have to spell out everything in a story and it is okay to allow the listener to put pieces together. Maybe the younger crowd is all over this story and not confused. If that is the case, and if that is your target audience, then you are fine.
ReplyDeleteDmitry, thank you so much for the entertaining story! Very well done, the audio was clear, and the narration was great.
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